Hello reader again, welcome to another part of jake's 100 word challenge, i hope you like my story and try not to get scared.-Thurston
A dark gloomy forest with dark blurry bamboo, protected by little yellow lights. A boy named Jake walks there every day doing lots of things to keep it safe. After a few weeks the days got longer the face of jake's face was old and moldy the crystal lights started to talk and said “Magic!!”. That's when he noticed he was surrounded by nonstop magic but his time was near the only way to save him was from…..
Thurston, You are trying to select interesting words (blurry, gloomy).
ReplyDeleteThe reader gets lost in your story because you have tried to cover too much action in just 100 words. That's not possible.
You were using third person until: the lights strike, after that it's in first person
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